读后续写高分范文讲评，英语作文提分全干货

作者：王春成老师

读后续写是近几年高考中出现的新题型，该题型不仅考查考生的语言表达能力,还考查考生对文章的理解能力、对文章结构的把握能力和对情节发展的判断构思能力。

考生只有在对原文准确深刻理解的基础上,对情节的发展做出判断,运用合适的构思能力,才能做出优秀的续写。因此,读后续写具有较大的难度。

本文潍坊一中王春成老师以近年高考及联考真题中出现的关于“熊”的读后续写为例，为大家讲评如何写好读后续写。

语篇一

熊熊小百科

熊能分辨颜色，视力类似于人。熊的嗅觉和听觉十分灵敏，能指引它们找到食物、发现入侵者并对其他危险作出警觉。以熊的体型而言，它们的奔跑速度相当快，在奔跑中可以轻松超越人类。黑熊是爬树高手，而棕熊普遍缺乏这一技能。熊非常聪明，且充满好奇心。它们天性并无恶意，但在捍卫食物和家庭时，会表现得坚决而残忍。熊在察觉到威胁靠近时，会立刻进入防御状态。它们通常竭力避免与人类相遇，可一旦它们在人类活动范围内安家，或者已经习惯了人类存在时，行为就会变得大胆而不可预测，有时候甚至是主动好斗而且是掠夺性的。

语篇二

续写范文

A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. He exposed his sharp teeth, glaring at us as he ran forward. And again the bear stood to his back legs, wanting to tear the fence like a monster. It seemed that his mouth was full of blood and his eyes were red with anger. Seeing such terrible scene, I could feel a chill from my back. Elli was stunned there, with the mouth widely open. I had to take action, so I picked my courage and tried to frighten him away with the pepper spray, but finally failed.

At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. It landed near our camp and its loud noises scared that bear. He looked irritated and charged at us again. I cried out, “Watch out!” We ran away immediately and ran as fast as we could to the helicopter. Thank my God! We succeeded in climbing onto the helicopter, gasping with relief. Looking down at the bear, we found that he was eating the bread we just made. Several hours later, we arrived at home safe and sound, but we realized that we should do something to help the bears.

语篇三

学生问题

没有读懂什么是come to oneself，前文对后文的照应没有体现，自然收尾没有体现出危险的经历；lose one’s mind用错。

续写范文

Paragraph 1:

The bear suddenly stood up in a threatening way. Meanwhile, Colin threw the sausages in his backpack towards the bear, hoping the flavor would attract it. Unfortunately, the bear rushed to him. Colin was pushed to the ground and bitten in the left leg. “Ah!” he screamed with the unbearable pain. Blood flowing out, Colin suddenly remembered the knife in his pocket. He stabbed the bear’s neck as fast and strong as possible. The bear roared with pain and ran away. Losing much blood, Colin lost his consciousness afterwards.

Paragraph 2:

After what seemed like hours, Colin came to himself. He found himself surrounded by the logging workers in the camp. He was being cared for by a doctor. It was Vito who saved Colin. When he drove back, he spotted the bleeding bear and sensed that something terrible must have happened. With the blue ribbons leading his way, he finally found Colin. “You are so lucky, Colin. Without being noticed, you could have been killed for loss of blood. God help those who help themselves.” said the doctor.

拓展能力

请根据以上语篇，整理和汇总有关熊的描写和表达，形成自己的语料库。

本文作者：山东省潍坊一中王春成老师