【书面表达】20年阅卷老师揭秘:英语作文想拿高分的杀手锏!

写英语作文,总是会不经意的蹦出一系列类似口语化的简单表述,于是就被阅卷老师认定为英语水平不那么高……为了让阅卷老师见识到我们的“真实水平”,着实需要下一番功夫,比如可以从把简单句变“高级”开始。

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形式 “活” 起来

插入  在句中插入某些成分,起补充、说明作用。最明显的特征是被插入成分前后都用逗号隔开。

You and I are teenagers. It offers teenagers a chance. We can enjoy sports and learn about Chinese culture.

It offers teenagers, like you and me, a chance to enjoy sports and learn about Chinese culture.

嵌入  在某一分句中嵌入另一分句,构成句中句。最常见的情况是:定语从句嵌入宾语从句中、感叹句嵌入宾语从句中、名词性从句嵌入强调句型中。

We are told something. We doubt whether it is true. We are in the habit of raising doubts. We can find the correct answer. We can learn more.

If we are in the habit of raising doubts as to whether what we are told is true, we can find the correct answer and learn more.

前置  将正常词序下通常较晚出现的成分移至句首,使之处于突出的位置从而受到特殊的强调,这种手段为前置。

I really want to obtain this precious opportunity. I will be able to improve my organizational ability, communication skills as well as my confidence in speaking English in public by offering my service.

I really want to obtain this precious opportunity because, by offering my service, I will be able to improve my organizational ability, communication skills as well as my confidence in speaking English in public.

后置   在遣词造句时将最重要的内容置于句尾,使之处于突出地位,这种手段为后置。故造句时应避免头重脚轻,注意句子结构的匀称。在名词性从句中,借助it作形式主语或形式宾语,将真正的主语或宾语后置;在同位语从句中,主语太长而谓语太短,将同位语从句后置;使用全部倒装,将主语后置。

The test will enhance the examinee's consciousness of health. On the contrary it will also be more likely to result in over anxiety. People all said that.

It's said that the test will enhance the examinee's consciousness of health, but on the contrary it will also be more likely to result in over anxiety.

同位   对与之同位的名词或短语提供补充说明的成分称之为同位语,可以是一个词也可以是一个完整的句子。为表示同位概念,也可使用连接性状语namely / that's / in other words / such as 等,还可使用破折号表示。

DNA test is a new technique. It is done by analyzing the saliva sample. It appears in the foreign medical industry.

DNA test, a new technique, which is done by analyzing the saliva sample, appears in the foreign medical industry.

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内容 “实” 起来

遣词

01 词汇的升级

(1) I think that reading is important.

→ I deem that reading is essential / fundamental.

→ I argue that reading really matters /counts.

→ I maintain that reading is crucial.

→ I hold that reading is significant /primary / critical.

(2) We can look at this problem in many ways.

→ We can view this problem in many facets / aspects / respects.

 02 单词和短语巧妙互用

(1) I think that reading is important.

→ I hold the belief that reading plays an important role in our life.

→ I harbor the opinion that reading is of vital importance.

→ I hold the position that reading means a great deal to our life.

→ I am under the impression that nothing is more crucial to our life than reading.

→ From my perspective, reading is to our life what water is to fish.

→ As far as I am concerned, the importance of reading to our life can never be exaggerated / denied / ignored / doubted.

(2) I will never forget the pleasant experience.

→ The pleasant experience leaves a deep impression on me.

→ The pleasant experience is deeply / firmly rooted in my memory.

→ The pleasant experience will never be fading from my mind / memory.

(3) I sincerely hope that you will consider my suggestions.

→ It is my sincere hope that you will take my proposals into account /consideration.

(4) Quite a few things caused the traffic accident.

→ Quite a few things triggered the traffic accident.

→ Quite a few things gave rise to the traffic accident.

→ Quite a few things lead to / result in the traffic accident.

(5) I love reading.

→ I am crazy about / fond of / into /feel like reading.

→ I possess great interest in reading.

→ Reading exerts a tremendous fascination on me.

→ I am obsessed with reading.

→ I am captured by reading.

03短语的升级

(1)try to do sth→ take pains to do sth→ do one’s utmost to do sth→ exhaust every effort in one’s power to do sth→ spare no effort to do sth→ go all out to do sth

If I am lucky enough to be chosen to become a volunteer, I will do my utmost to serve the children in the remote areas.I will spare no effort to build the hope into a bridge between the children in the remote areas and the volunteers like me.In order to make it a better place for us and children, I will exhaust every effort in my power.

(2)have to→be forced to do sth→be obliged to do sth→ have no choice but to do sth→have no alternative but to do sth

Some poor students have to do some part-time jobs to earn money in order to continue their education.Some poverty-stricken students have no choice but to do some part-time jobs to earn money in order to continue their education.

造句

01吸引眼球的定语从句

找准信息的最佳结合点,在某一关键信息词后接定语从句,以此将简单句压缩,实现巧妙 “嫁接”。

(1)Chaplin was a famous director. He directed a number of films, and most of them were silent. They were popular with people.

→ Chaplin, who was a distinguished director, directed a sea of films,most of which were silent and appealed to people of all ages.

(2) After all the guests got up and left, half of the dishes were left untouched, and this result was out of my expectation.

→After all the guests got up and left, half of the dishes were left untouched, which was out of my expectation.

(3) Take Abraham Lincoln, for example. He was born in a poor family, and only received a limited education. Yet through his painstaking effort, he changed not only his own fate but also the history of America. Even to this day, Lincoln is regarded as one of the most inspiring figures in the world.

→Take Abraham Lincoln, who was born in a poor family, for example, he only received a limited education, but through his painstaking effort, he changed not only his own fate but also the history of America, which also made him one of the most inspiring figures in the world even to this day. →…but through his painstaking effort, not only did he change his own fate, but he also transformed the history of America…

(4)The girl is spoken highly of, for her composition is well written.

→ The girl, whose composition is well written, is spoken highly of.

→ The reason why the girl is spoken highly of is that her composition is well written.

→ It is because her composition is well written that the girl is spoken highly of.

 (5) In that picture, three students are sitting around the table. There are three books on it.

→ As is vividly shown in the picture, around the table on which are three books are seated three students.

→ As we can see from the picture, around the table with three books on it are seated three students.

02灵活好用的名词性从句

根据意义需要巧妙地将其中的一个简单句融为另一个简单句的句子成分,从而实现两个简单句的完美对接。

(1)He said a lot at the meeting. His words were very attractive.

→ What he said at the meeting was exceedingly appealing.

→ It is what he said at the meeting that was exceedingly appealing.

(2)We fear fear.

→ What we have to fear is fear itself.

→ It is fear itself that we have to fear.

(3)Our women volleyball team had won the championship. The news encouraged us all greatly.

→ The news that our women volleyball team had won the championship encouraged us all greatly.

→ That our women volleyball team had won the championship encouraged us all greatly.

→ It was extremely inspiring that our women volleyball team had won the championship.

→ All of us were greatly heartened by the news that our women volleyball team had won the championship.

→ What our women volleyball team had won greatly heartened us all.

→ All of us were greatly inspired by what our women volleyball team had won.

→ It is the news that our women volleyball team had won the championship that encouraged us all greatly.

(4)Not your money, but you interest me most.

→ What interests me most is not your money but you.

→ It is not your money, but you that appeal to me most.

I love not your body, but your soul.

→ What I love is not your body, but your soul.

→ It is not your body, but your soul that I love.

03富有文采的状语从句

依据前后逻辑关系使用从属连词将简单句连接起来。注意要点间的关联,防止强拉硬扯。

(1)He heard the news. The Chinese women’s football team beat the US team. He was so happy that he could not go to sleep.

→ When / Instantly / Immediately / Directly he heard the news that the Chinese women’s football team beat the US team, he was so happy that he could not go to sleep.

→ (Upon / On) hearing the news that the Chinese women’s football team beat the US team, so happy was he that he could not go to sleep.

→ The moment /minute / instant he heard the news that the Chinese women’s football team beat the US team, so happy was he that he could not go to sleep.

(2)If I had the chance, I would make donations to orphans eager to gain future success through learning.

→ Given / Considering / Seeing that I had the chance, I would make donations to orphans eager to gain future success through learning.

→ Providing / Provided / Suppose / Supposing that I had the chance, I would make donations to orphans eager to gain future success through learning.

→ I would make donations to orphans eager to gain future success through learning on condition that I had the chance.

(3) Though he is a child, he is learned.

→ While he is a child, he is learned.

→ Child as / though he is, he is learned.

(3)All the fish in the river did not die out until the villagers realized how serious the problem is.

→ Not until all the fish in the river did die out did the villagers realize how serious the problem is.

→ It is not until all the fish in the river did die out that the villagers realized how serious the problem is.

 04非谓语和“独立”是一家

(1)The teacher walked out of the lab, and some students followed him

→ The teacher walked out of the lab, (with) some students following him.

→ The teacher, followed by some students, walked out of the lab.

(2)When false is taken for true, true becomes false.

→ With false taken for true, true becomes false.

→ False taken for true, true becomes false.

(3) I thought that his solution might be wrong. I carefully analyzed the problem. I tried to work it out in a different way.

→ Thinking that his solution might be wrong, I carefully analyzed the  problem and tried to work it out in a different way.

05修辞手法不可少

(1)To finish the work ahead of time, they have been busy recently.

→ To accomplish the work ahead of time, they have been as busy as a bee recently.

(2)Beijing held the opening ceremony of the 29th Olympic Games successfully at August 8th, 2008.

→ August 8th, 2008 saw Beijing holding the opening ceremony of the 29th Olympic Games successfully.

(3) We must take effective measures to handle / tackle the problem.

→ Effective measures must be taken to handle / tackle the problem.

(4)Of the two, I think the latter is the better.

→ Of the two, the latter wins my favor.

(5) Reading can enrich our mind, enlarge our horizons, and mature our personality.Humor help us bear our burdens, lessen our tension, overcome our frustration, relax ourselves, and make life easier.Many students, if not most, find it impossible to resist the temptation to indulge themselves in playing games, enjoying romance with girls, or killing time passively in the dorms. When it approaches graduation, as a result, they find their academic records less impressive.

06仿写——似是而非

(1)A is to B what / as C is to D

A book is to the mind what food is to the body.A positive attitude is to life what the sun is to the earth.Honesty is to the people as life is to the creature.Cleanness is to the can teen what water is to the fish.

(2) Helen is the most beautiful girl.

→ Helen is one of the most beautiful girls.

→ Helen is one of the most beautiful girls that I have ever seen.

→ No one is more beautiful than Helen in the world.Nothing is more important than health, because without good health, we would have nothing, including happiness.Nothing is more important than honesty, because without honesty, we would have nothing, including love and even success. Nothing is more important than friends, because without friends, we would have nothing, including happiness.

(3) Dream never fails to enable us to be a better pilot of our life.Diligence never fails to enable us to be a better pilot of languages.Love never fails to enable us to be a better pilot of our family.A sincere heart never fails to enable us to be a better pilot of our friends.Women are usually attracted by beautiful clothes.Beautiful clothes always catch women’s eyes.Beautiful clothes never fail to fascinate women.Ads never fail to exert a tremendous fascination on people.Exams never fail to exert tremendous pressure on us students.A reasonable educational system never fails to exert a positive influence on our country.

试题回顾

假定你是李华,你的新西兰朋友Terry将去中国朋友家做客,发邮件向你询问有关习俗。请你回复邮件,内容包括:

1. 到达时间;
2. 合适的礼物;
3. 餐桌礼仪。

注意:

1. 词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
【思路点拨】

本文是一篇电子邮件类应用文写作。餐桌礼仪也是考生比较熟悉的话题。成文时注意以下几点:

一、内容要点要齐全:

1.到达时间;
2.合适的礼物;
3.餐桌礼仪。
二、时态:

主要用一般现在时和将来时;

三、人称:

第二、三人称。

四、注意使用恰当的高级词汇、短语或句型,以提高作文的水平;
五、适当使用一些连接词和插入语,使文章表达自然、流畅。

1. 浏览信息要点。

2. 三个任务点,第一段内容:问候对方,马上呈现对方所涉及的话题,拜访中国家庭,做客时间的要求和忌讳! 第二段内容:做客拜访的合适礼物,可以适当延展,初次拜访,亲密朋友之间拜访,二次拜访,家庭情况适合的礼物,通用的礼物等。第三段:table manners,可以描述两三个通常的中国人的餐桌礼节和忌讳的地方,有鲜明特色之处,最后一句表达祝愿。

3. 时态,给对方的建议和说明,用一般现在时,描述风俗礼仪这是客观规律性的东西,用一般现在时。

4. 头脑风暴短语、句型结构,开始打草稿。

5. 行文。

6. 检查拼写和语法。

【满分作文】

Dear Terry,

How are you doing? Learning that you are about to pay a visit to a Chinese friend and confused about the Chinese customs, I am writing to put forward some advice.

Firstly, I would 1ike to suggest that you arrive 5 to 10 minutes earlier, which is common in Chinese traditional culture. Secondly, if I were you I would bring some appropriate gifts with me, such as souvenirs from my own country. Besides, table manners are also what you should pay attention to. For example, you are not supposed to stick your chopsticks into your food. Instead, laying them on your dish is a smart choice.

If you have any other problems, please don’t hesitate to contact me.

【素材积累】

做客礼仪:

1. 预先约定一个时间以便对方事先作好安排。如果事先已经约定好了时间,就应遵守约定,准时到达,如需提早十分钟二十分钟之内可以接受,不要迟到,以免主人等候,也不要太早到,以免主人未作好准备。这是一个基本礼节问题。

2.如果有专属地域文化特色的礼物是最好的。如果朋友家有长辈,带点烟酒和茶叶或一些老人家用的保健品等;如果朋友家有小孩,带点儿童玩具或买箱牛奶,然后加点茶叶啥的;不要送钟、梨、伞等这些东西,被认为不吉祥。

3.主人会请客人入座上席,再请长辈入座客人旁。入座的时侯要从椅子的左边进入。在中餐结束时,筷子应整齐地放在靠碗右边的桌上,并应等客人们都放下筷子以后,主人示意离席后方可以离开,不能自己吃完了放下筷子就走,这样做是很没礼貌的表现。

常用词语和句子

准时:on time/punctually
餐桌礼仪:table manners
合适的、恰当的:appropriate
拜访:pay a visit to
You are supposed/expected/required to do…
It' s a good idea to…
It' s appropriate/suitable to do …
It' s sensible/reasonable/advisable to do …
It' s good manners to do …
It' s noteworthy that…
I think it would be more helpful if you could do…
It would be wise of you to…
It' s desirable to do …
It' s inappropriate to do …
It' s impolite to do…
It' s unwise/inadvisable to do …
Never (助动词/系动词/情态动词)主语 谓语动词…
It' s not suitable for you to do…in such a  situation.

试题回顾

你受学生会委托为校宣传栏“英语天地”写一则通知,请大家观看一部英语短片Growing Together,内容包括:
1. 短片内容:学校的发展;
2. 放映时间、地点;
3. 欢迎对短片提出意见。

注意:

1. 词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
【写作点拨】
英语书面通知的时态应该以一般将来时为主,多使用被动语态、简单句。在通知中不应当过度的使用较复杂的词语和读起来拗口的句子。
第二个注意点:层次一定要清晰,一个层次要表达一件事情,使人看起来一目了然。
【满分范文】

Notice

Boys and girls,

May I have your attention, please? Recently, an outstanding movie will be shown in our campus. Welcome to join us end enjoy it! Here are some relevant details about it.
To begin with, the name of the movie is Growing together, which is about the development of our beloved school; as a result, it will be not only meaningful but also interesting. Besides, it will be in the library from 2:00 to 4:00 in the afternoon on June 9th . What’s more, everyone of you will be welcome to take part in it, enjoying the movie, having a heated discussion afterwards and giving your own comments.
Hopefully, you would make it to our activity. I have the confidence that you will have a great time.

The Student Union

试题回顾

假定你是李华,你的英国朋友Peter 来信询问你校学生体育运动情况。请给他回信,内容包括:
1. 学校的体育场馆;
2. 主要的运动项目;
3. 你喜欢的项目。

注意:

1. 词数100左右:
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
【思路点拨】
本题作文为提纲式作文,形式依然是书信,即给英国朋友Peter介绍学校体育运动情况,属于学校生活话题。这一话题贴合学生生活的实际,学生并不陌生,有话可说。
首先可以介绍学校的体育场馆,场馆的位置,大小,开放时间等等。然后简要介绍学校主要开设的体育项目有哪些,可挑选一到两个做详细介绍,如学生的活动时间,活动形式,以及此类活动的好处等。再次简要分析自己喜欢的体育项目是什么,并简单分析喜欢的原因,自己从中得到的益处等。文章可主要采用一般现在时态,第一人称的方式来写。
【满分范文】

Dear Peter,

I am exceedingly delighted to hear from you. You asked me in your last letter about the physical exercise in our school and the following information may give you a rough sketch.
To begin with, a fabulous new stadium has been built up, which has become the new landmark in our school. Moreover, with the stadium set up, a wide range of sports events are able to be held, of which ping-pong, football as well as running competitions enjoy great popularity. As for me, I’m intoxicated with basketball since it has been giving me strength to confront the challenges in my life.
All in all, I sincerely invite you to come to our school and see for yourself.

Yours,

Li Hua

试题回顾

第一节  应用文写作

假定你是李华,你校英语协会招聘志愿者,接待来访的国外中学生。请你写信应聘,内容包括:
1. 口语能力;
2. 相关经验;
3. 应聘目的。

注意:

1. 词数80左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
【思路点拨】

本篇书面表达属于应用文,要求写应聘信。

第一步:根据提示可知,学校英语协会招聘志愿者,接待来访的国外中学生。要求写封应聘信,内容包括:1.口语能力:2.相关经验;3.应聘目的。

第二步:根据写作要求确定关键词(组)。

第三步:根据提示和关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步:连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接和过渡,书写一定要规范清晰,保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。本文内容完整,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。

【范文】

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Li Hua. And I am writing to apply for being a volunteer of our school English association.

I have a good command of English and have been to the USA twice. So I can communicate well with native speakers of English. What's more, I am kind and friendly to other people. So I can easily get along with foreign students.

I'm particularly interested in this job because I want to further improve my oral English capabilities and interpersonal communication skills. Hopefully I can receive your acceptance.

Yours faithfully,

Li Hua

试题回顾

第二节  读后续写(满分25分)

阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.

We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afermoon. Uncle Paul, my dad's friend, picked us up from the airport and drove me up to his farm in Pecos.

His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. 'The day starts at dawn on my farm,' he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.  They looked really cool.

In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn't going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don't be late for supper,' Uncle Paul cried, 'and keep to the track so that you don't get lost!' “OK!' my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late aftermoon sunmixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven ( 编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.

注意:

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
【思路点拨】
读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息,不仅能读懂字面含义,还要理清文章的脉络。续篇这篇短文时,考生要搞清楚故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的变化等。在此基础上,考生要顺着文章的思路,根据线索,发挥想象,对其后的情节进行合理预测,并用语言表达出来。
通过阅读所给文章可知,父亲带儿子去西部荒野的一个朋友家体验农场生活,见父亲和叔叔骑马,儿子也很想骑,于是亲身上马体验。
根据第一段所给首句Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.这一句是故事发展的转折点,可从rabbit出现后带来的反应扩展开,可以写马的反应,也可以写人的反应,但要注意与第二段首句相呼应。第二段首句是We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.这一句呼应前文Uncle Paul的叮嘱——不要误吃晚饭,可从如何寻路返回农场去写。
续写时注意要使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语,我们要熟悉所给划线词语,恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右;续写完成后要用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
【满分范文】
Suddenly a lttle rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. My horse turned to the 1eft to avoid the ittle rabbit as I held on tightly and tried not to fall. Then my dad turned around and shouted, Hoid on! All of a sudden the horse began to run My dad tried to keep up behind us. For a few minutes my horse slowed down to a trot and then stopped beside a river. I looked around and realized that we were way off the track.
We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Luckily the stars came out and gave us a little light when we were looking for the way to the farm house. After what must have been several hours, we suddenly heard the sound of sheep in the distance. My dad and I both rode our horses towards the sound of the sheep. As we got closer we saw Uncle Paul with a flashlight waving us over. What a night!

试题回顾

假设你是晨光中学的机器人兴趣小组组长李津,你的美国朋友Chris就读于天津某国际学校,他曾在机器人技能竞赛中获奖。你打算邀请他加入你的团队,参加即将与7月底在天津举行的世界青少年机器人技能竞赛。请根据以下提示代表兴趣小组给他写一封电子邮件。
1. 比赛的时间、地点;
2. 邀请他的原因;
3. 训练计划将发送其邮箱,请他提出建议。

注意:

1. 词数不少于100;
2. 可适当加入细节,使内容充实、行文连贯;
3. 开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。

参考词汇:

世界青少年机器人技能竞赛
the World Adolescent Robotics Competition

Dear Chris,
I have good news to tell you.
...
I'm looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Jin

【思路点拨】
本篇书面要求写一封邀请信。写作的时候要注意以下几点:
一、动笔前,一定要认真分析要点,理解要点要表达的含义,不能遗漏要点,跑题偏题。内容要点包括:
1. 代表兴趣小组发出邀请;
2. 介绍比赛的时间、地点等安排;
3. 说明邀请他的原因,包括Chris曾在机器人技能竞赛中获奖;
4. 告诉他训练计划将发送其邮箱,请他提出建议。
二、写作时注意准确运用时态,对于本文来说,以一般将来时为主,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系,尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【内容要点】
1. 代表兴趣小组发出邀请;
2. 介绍比赛的时间、地点等安排;
3. 说明邀请他的原因,包括Chris 曾在机器人技能竞赛中获奖;
4. 告诉他训练计划将发送其邮箱,请他提出建议。
【满分范文】

Dear Chris,

I have good news to tell you. The World Adolescent Robotics Competition will be held in Tianjin at the end of July. Hearing that you once took part in a Robotics Skills Competition and won an award, I, on behalf of the Robotics Hobby Group, intend to invite you to join our team in the coming competition. I am sure that your involvement will not only help us in winning the award but also enhance the friendship between our two schools.
With this email I also send you our training plan, about which I wish to get your advice because you are more experienced than us. We sincerely hope that we can participate in the competition as team partners.
I' m looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Jin

试题回顾

第一节(15分)

假设你是红星中学高三学生李华,你的英国朋友Jim在给你的邮件中提到他对中国文化感兴趣,计划明年来北京上大学。他向你咨询相关信息。请给他回邮件,内容包括:
1. 表示欢迎;
2. 推荐他上哪所大学;
3. 建议他做哪些准备工作。

注意:

1. 词数不少于50;
2. 开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。

Dear Jim,

...

Yours,

Li Hua

【思路点拨】
本文为提纲式作文,文章要求写推荐信,为英国朋友介绍北京的大学。首先可以介绍一下写作背景(Jim对中国文化感兴趣,要来中国学习),表达欢迎。然后推荐一所大学,并简要介绍推荐的原因(如大学的特色,可以学到什么等)。再次简单介绍应该做哪方面的准备,如可以提前学习汉语,读点有关中国传统文化的书,了解中国的习俗,让自己更好地适应中国的生活。文章可采用一般现在时,人称可以使用第二人称。
【满分范文】

Dear Jim,

I'm so glad to hear your future education plan in Beijing in your last letter. First I would like to express my warmest welcome to you and I am sure you will have the most unforgettable experience during your college in Beijing.
Learning your keen interest in Chinese culture, I suggest you apply for Peking University, one of the best universities in China. Its Chinese Literature major is, perfect for you where you. can be completely soaked in Chinese profound history and rich culture. As for preparation some reading in advance in needed like The Story of the Stone while some online courses of spoken Chinese can be helpful for you to adapt into the Chinese language environment.
I sincerely hope your dream will come true and it’s my pleasure to show you around in Beijing when that day comes. If you have further questions, please feel free to let me know.

Yours,

Li Hua

试题回顾

第二节(20分)

假设你是红星中学高三学生李华,请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,写一篇英文周记,记述你们上周接待外国学生,带领他们体验中国茶文化的过程。

注意:词数不少于60。

【思路点拨】
本文为图片介绍类作文,这类作文是根据给出的一幅或几幅图画所提供的信息写短文。此类题的体裁较广泛,可以是记叙文、说明文,也可以是议论文。按照本文的要求可知,是写一篇记叙文。

1. 认真读图,把握中心。

根据提示可知,内容是带领外国学生体验中国茶文化的全过程,介绍了茶具,泡茶,沏茶,品茶的过程,所以这是这组图画所要表达的中心。
2. 初步构思,考虑用词、短语、句型和时态。

在把握了文章的中心后,应在内心构思一个基本的框架,并考虑使用恰当的词语、短语和句型,以充分地表达文章的内容。本文是讲述上周发生的事情,故时态要以过去时为主,人称是第一人称,尽可能地充分利用所学的短语或句型来表述具体的内容。这是体现自身能力的重要一环。

3. 连词成句,然后再连句成文。

运用适当的单词或短语正确表达各图的意思。然后再将各图的单个句子串连起来。串连时,要注意使用适当的连接词语或过渡性语句,不至于让读者觉得文章中出现跳跃现象,更使上下文更为紧凑、自然。

4.反复审核,修改错误。

一篇文章写好后,应进行检查,看短文中是否有错,如拼写、用词、时态、语态及表达方面的错误。5.宜详则详,该略则略。对于一些细节方面的内容,如果是文章必不可少的,在写作过程中是不可将其忽略的。如果是可有可无的细节,则可视具体情况进行增删。据此,我们在读图时一定要注意阅读各图中的一些细节内容,看其是否影响文章的内容。
【满分范文】
Last week, we took the foreign students in our school to experience the authentic tea culture, which turned out be to extremely rewarding.
On arriving at the tea house, the foreign students were impressed by the unique tea pots and tea cups. I gave them a vivid and informative introduction of tea culture, including its profound history, its rich variety, and the exquisite craftsmanship of making tea with their interest greatly sparked, I then began to teach them how to make tea.
In order to deliver a clear presentation, I slowly explained the traditional procedure of making tea in detail. Absorbed in every move of mine, the foreign students were once again amazed by this unique culture and they couldn’t help taking pictures from time to time.
Next came the moment when I asked them to have a try themselves. Washing the tea pots, adding tea leaves, and pouring water into the cups, they followed my instructions and were really immersed in charming tea culture. The tea house witnessed a really enjoyable time for all of us.
At the end of the activity, holding the tea bags in our hands, we took a picture to memorize the unforgettable day. It suddenly hit me that traditional culture like tea culture was of great charm and huge value. And I swelled with pride to spread our own culture to people all over the world.
【亮点说明】
巧妙使用定语从句,提升了文章档次:
Last week, we took the foreign students in our school to experience the authentic tea culture, which turned out be to extremely rewarding.
使用非谓语动词,使句子表达更简洁:
On arriving at the tea house…
I gave them a vivid and informative introduction of tea culture, including its profound history, its rich variety,
Absorbed in every move of mine, the foreign students were once again amazed by this unique culture
holding the tea bags in our hands, we took a picture to memorize the unforgettable day.
使用倒装句突出重点。
Next came the moment when I asked them to have a try themselves.
使用it做形式主语,使表达更地道。
It suddenly hit me that traditional culture like tea culture was of great charm and huge value.

试题回顾

书面表达(满分25分)

请阅读下面文字,并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。

【写作内容】

1. 用约30个词概括上述利用排名( ratings)进行消费的现象;
2. 谈谈你如何看待消费排名,然后用2-3个理由或论据支撑你的看法。

【写作要求】

1. 写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句;
2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3. 不必写标题

【评分标准】

内容完整,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当。
【思路点拨】
先用30词概括阅读材料,然后针对材料中的话题写一篇议论文谈看法。首先要认真阅读两段有关消费排名现象及观点的纯文字材料,然后进行比较和分析,表明态度,作出价值判断。
文章首段要简要介绍两段材料,第一段材料为一对母子买旅行箱看了网上的评论,结果买回来的旅行箱质量很好。第二段材料为一帮人去餐馆吃饭,看了on-line rating,结果饭菜很不好吃,从而凸显出online rating的不靠谱。
然后写你对online rating的看法,表明观点,注意用2-3个论据来支撑自己的看法。
文章属于议论文,要注意主题句的使用,论点之间要注意有条理。文章可主要采用一般现在时,第三人称来写。
【满分范文】

Possible version one:

As a major channel of consumption information, the rating is an efficient source of information for shopping in our own consumption. Interestingly, the same rating may have different influences on different consumers.
There is no doubt that it is unwise to depend completely on the ratings in consumption. The advantages and disadvantages of ratings are often closely related. It is necessary to hold an objective attitude towards ratings.

Possible version two:

Nowadays, most commodities or services are rated through certain channels. These ratings,  easy to access, are playing an increasingly important role in customers' purchase decision. However, results are sometimes unsatisfactory.
There is no denying that such ratings might bring convenience to consumers, but they are often misleading and unreliable. As we all know, most of the ratings are based on others’ judgment on the product or service concerned. Every judgment comes from a specific need or a unique psychological state. Apparently, blindly following others' advice will affect our own judgment. Another fact should not be neglected that some of the ratings are the outcome of a careful manipulation of companies or sellers. It has become a common practice for some to pay for good ratings on their products or services so as to increase their sales.
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