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关于狗的神态描写

How to make the dog in your writing vivid andeye-catching?

1.Uponhis master’s arrival, the dog leapt tohis feet ，snorted happily and bounded forward.(高兴狗狗)

2.The dog curled into a wet lump and lay shivering on theground. (可怜狗狗)

3.Aware of the immense danger, the crippled dog was doing impression of a corpse. （胆怯狗狗）

4.He stretched, shook himself and circled several times before dropping to the ground.（伸个懒腰抖抖身，保证有个好睡眠）

5.With pricked ears, he watched for a moment and then yawned. （警觉狗狗）

6. Lying on the ground，the dog kept his eyes wide open, ears flat,a vibrating growl deep in his chest.（别惹我，后果自负）

7.The dog wandered off to rest her noses in her paws.（我想静静，不想理你）

8.Dogs take much pleasure in rolling andrubbing their necks and backs with their paws.（调皮狗狗）

9.Seeing the meat in the master’s hand, the little dog wagged its tail and watched with hopeful eyes.（馋狗狗）

10.At the sight of a stranger approaching the house, the dog watched him, ears up, head slightly cocked. （高度戒备狗狗）

11.The dog, when intently watching and slowly approaching the prey, kept one of its fore-legs doubled up for a long time, ready for the next cautious step.（伺机一扑,成败在此一举）

12.Little puppies enjoy playing growling and biting each other’s faces and legs.（天真烂漫小可爱）

13.The dog got worried, crawling up around the old man’s feet as if to seek for safety and warmth. （好怕怕，别过来）

人与动物的读后续写集锦

A heroic dog

Like most dogs whose homes are situated on large plotsof land，one New Zealand dogregularly went off exploring through the farmland around his home forhours at a time.

But as Louie，asheepdog rescued from a shelter when he was just a puppy，got older，his trips got shorter andshorter.Now that Louie is 12 years old，hechooses to stay close to home and hardly ever goes out to explore any more，which is why his family was soworried when he recently disappeared and didn't return home as usual.

“My mother was a little upset as he had stopped hiswandering，” said Marolyn Diver，whose parentsown Louie.“Wewere very concerned that he might forget where his home was.” But thankfully，Louie turned up at the house a fewhours later.“He looked so tired and had basically just collapsed(崩溃)，”Marolyn said.“We were concerned that someone might have hurt him.But then werealized there was a small noteattached to Louie's collar.After readingthe note，I felt complete reliefand relaxed，and then my heartmelted.”

“Louie is the hero of the day，” read the note，which was written by a neighborabout a mile away.“He led me to Maddy in distress stuck under a pile of branches．Cheers，Rob．” “According to Rob，Louie was waiting for him at hishouse and demanded to be followed.Rob said that he was 100 percent sure thatLouie knew what he was doing，and leading him to Maddywas his pure focus，” Marolyn explained.

注意：

1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

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Once Rob found Maddy，Louiehelped him dig her out.

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“That night we were very worried about Louie，” Marolyn said.

【参考范文】

Once Rob found Maddy，Louie helped him dig her out. According to Rob，Louie pulled at branches and dug her out of the ground.Rob said that as soon as Maddy was free，both dogs ran to a nearby pond and jumped into it and began to drink water.Then he gave Louie a huge handful ofdog biscuits as a thank-you.He knew that Louie might get introuble for being late for home，sohe thought he would write a small note to explain why Louie was absent.

“That night we were very worriedabout Louie，” Marolyn said.“He could hardlywalk and looked terrible.We were concerned that he might not make it through the night.” Thankfully，Louie was back to normal the next morning when Rob came by with Maddy for avisit.Marolyn said，“It has changed the way I look at him.And I think my parents feel the same way.I'm so proud of him.”

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。

It was one of the hottest days of the dry season.We had not seen rain in almost a month.The crops were dying.Cows had stopped giving milk.The streams were long gone back into the earth.If we didn't seesome rain soon we would lose everything.

I was in the kitchen making lunch for the family when I saw my six year- old son，Billy，walking toward the woods.I could only see his back.He wasn't walking in his usual way.He was obviously walking with a great effort，trying to be as still aspossible.Minutes after he disappeared into the woods，he came running out again，toward the house.

Moments later，however，he was once again walking in that slow and purposeful step toward the woods.This activity went on for over anhour：walking cautiously tothe woods，then running back to thehouse.Finally，my curiosity got the best of me.I crept out of the house and followed him on his journey.

He was cupping both hands in front of him as he walked；being very careful not to spill thewater he carried.Branches and thorns slapped(拍打)his little face but he did not try to avoid them.He had a much greaterpurpose.As I leaned against a tree to spy on him，Isaw the most amazing site.

Several large deers appeared threatening in front of him.But Billy walked right up to them.I almost screamed for him to get away.AndI saw a baby deer laying on the ground，obviously suffering from heavy loss of water and heat exhaustion，lift its head with great effort to lap(舔饮) up the water in my beautiful boy's hand.

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When the water was gone，Billy jumped up to run back to the house. Paragraph 2：

And later I knew what was going on.

【参考范文】

When the water was gone，Billy jumped up to run back to the house. My curiosity once again drove me to follow him back.After he reached the kitchen，heturned on the tap.As he was trying hard to cup both hands to receive the water，it was still running away through his fingers.And he also had great difficulty turning off the tap with hands occupied.He seemed to be so sorry and selfcondemned for his wasting of water.Wearing a note of upset on his face，he carried it carefully toward the woods.

And later I knew whatwas going on.It began to make sense to me why he wasn't walking in his usual way.I stood on the edge of the woods watching the most beautiful heart working so hard to save a life.As my tears began to hit the ground，they were suddenly joined by other drops...and more drops.It was as if the nature itself was moved by the great effort made by my son and began to weep with pride.

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。

Little snow had fallen this winter. For Reuven the frier(皮衣制作工) it was a bad year, and after long hesitation he decided to sell Zlateh the old goat. The town butcher had offered eightsilver coins for the goat. Reuven told his oldest boy, Aaron, to take the goat to town. Aaron understood what it meant, but he had to obey his father. Hissisters cried loudly.

Aaron took along two slices of bread to eat on the road. He needed to deliver the goat by evening and return the next day with the money. While the family said goodbye, Zlatch stood as patiently as ever. Zlateh trusted human beings.

The sun was shining when Aaron left. Suddenly the weather changed, and after awhile it began to snow. Soon their path was completely covered and Aaron got lost. Beneath the snow Aaron’s boots touched the softness of a plowed field. He realized that he was no longer on the road. Zlateh bleated (哀鸣) as if asking to be taken home. Aaron looked around hoping to find a farmer driving a sleigh(雪橇) along the way. But he could see nothing.

Aaron knew that if they did not find shelter, they would freeze to death. Suddenly he made out the shape of a hill. When he came near it, he realized that it was a large haystack (大干草堆)covered by snow. Aaron knew that they were saved. When he reached the hay, he dug a nest for himself and the goat. It was always warm in the hay. And hay wasfood for Zlateh.

Zlateh,sat down and seemed to have regained her confidence in man. Aaron ate his bread, but after the difficult journey he was still hungry. He looked at Zlatehand realized that he would not be starved to death. Goat’s milk was sweet.Zlateh ate frequently and her body gave forth an animal warmth, and Aaron hugged her tightly. The snow fell for 3 days and the windquieted down.

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Onthe morning of the fourth day, Aaron heard the ringing of sleigh bells.

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The news that Aaron and Zlateh were coming up the road was a great joy in the family.

【分析】

本篇书面表达是读后续写。

【详解】这是一篇记叙文。通过阅读所给文章可知，文章讲述了父亲Reuven为了度过艰难冬季，决定卖掉家里最老的山羊—Zlateh，长子Aaron负责将Zlateh送到屠户那里换钱，在途中，他们遭遇了风雪天气，Aaron寻得了大堆干草堆，又饿又冷的情况之下， Zlateh的羊奶给与了Aaron温饱。历经三天的风雪天气终于停了下来，在一位过路农民的帮助之下，他和羊一起回家与家人团聚。

续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：On the morning of the fourth day, Aaron heard the ringing ofsleigh bells. (第四天早上，Aaron听到了雪橇的铃声。)所以应该写Aaron从干草堆里出来后发生的事情，由首句的“Aaron heard the ringing if sleigh bells”，可知，要描述的内容应该是Aaron和羊如何获得雪橇主人的救助，比如大声呼喊；同时，由于前文提供的线索“Goat's milk was sweet. Zlateh ate frequently andher body gave forth an animal warmth, and Aaron hugged her tightly.( 羊奶是甜的。Zlateh频繁地吃干草，她的身体发出动物般的温暖，Aaron紧紧地拥抱着她。)可知，本段还应该描写Aaron在与羊建立了深刻感情之后的不忍分离等；第二段开头是The news that Aaron and Zlateh were coming upthe road was a great joy in the family. ( Aaron 和Zlateh在回家路上的消息，使全家人都非常高兴。) 本段应该描写家人的反应，情节和细节上要回应上文，尤其突出描写父亲的反应和变化，比如父亲改变的对羊的态度，不再卖掉或给与羊奖赏等，文末要进行主题升华。

还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。

【点睛】本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：

1.高级词汇：get out of; make up one’s mind; point out; rushout; in tears; think of

2.复合句式：

Aaronshouted loudly to the peasant who drove the sleigh for help. (who引导定语从句)

Aaron told them in tears how he had found the haystack and how Zlateh had fed him with her milk in the past few days. (how 引导宾语从句)

Nobody ever again thought of selling Zlateh, who had been an import family member tothem. (who引导非限制性定语从句)

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

At Dana's yard sale, Tim chose a baseball from the toys spread on the card table and asked about the price. Dana told him everything was a quarter except Nezumi,a cotton toy rat. It was gray with

some cotton sticking out from the hole where an ear had been torn off. 'Nezumi is extra special,so he has ten dollars. He needs a safe new home, 'Dana sighed.

Tim laughed saying he didn't have ten dollars. Dana laughed,too and gave Nezumi to Tim as a free gift because he was her friend. When Tim whispered it was sort of old, Dana said old toys were

the best, She then invited Tim to her birthday party the next evening,adding that her parents were

giving her a real rat for her birthday. Tim was amazed and asked if it was a live rat. 'Of course, ”Dana said.
At home, Tim's mother showed him the gift she had bought for Dana. It was a knitting spool(编织线轴）shaped like a mushroom. Mom said Dana could knit a scarf for her doll. Tim sighed that Dana

wasn't a knitting kind of person but a rat kind of person. Mom laughed after knowing whathad

happened. Together they drove to the pet store,where Tim searched and searched and selected a clear plastic ball,one in which the rat could run around on the floor safe from cats and dogs. Tim thought

of Nezumi's ear and decided Dana's new rat would need this ball.

The next day, Dana brought cupcakes to class. When she handed a cupcake to Tim,she asked if

Tim brought Nezumi to school as Nezumi liked to ride in backpacks. Tim was at a loss because

Nezumi was at home on his bed. Then Dana asked what gift he was giving her. Tim replied it was a

surprise. In silence they sat for a while before he heard Dana say her parents were giving her a new

bike for her birthday instead of a live rat because they thought rats would bite things.

注意：

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At home that afternoon, Tim stared at the plastic rat ball.
Paragraph 2:
All of a sudden,he had an idea.

【参考范文】

At home that afternoon, Tim stared at the plastic rat ball. Wondering about the use of the clear plastic ball if Dana had no rat, he started walking up and down the room with a frown on his face. Mom was surprised and asked him whatwas happening. Tim told her Dana wasn’t getting a live rat from her parents but a bike. As they were racking their brains to come up with an appropriate gift,Tim turned around and saw Nezumi on his bed.

All of a sudden, he had an idea. “What about buying a live rat for Dana as shelikes rats so much?” Tim asked. Mom smiled and gave him a thumbs-up. Again theydrove to the pet store, where Tim found some lovely small rats, each in its own cage running around full of energy. Carefully he examined them one by one and finally chose a gray one looking quite like Nezumi. “This certainly is a surprise yet the best!” Tim beamed at it.

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