8月7日雅思大作文示范写作 | 孩子犯错的自由 / 四六文摘

本期作者：朱玲娇

2021年8月7雅思大作文题目

Some people believe that children have the freedom to make mistakes, while others argue that adults should prevent them from doing so. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

范文及解析

Introduction

For children’s upbringing, some reckon that adults, especially parents, should avoid them from making mistakes, while I tend to harbour the view that teenagers should not be totally shackled.

【解析】教育类大话题：孩子是否有自由犯错？在一定限制条件之下，允许孩子试错，只要不走极端即可，如青少年犯罪。法律道德是基本底线。

Ø shackle vt. 束缚，阻挠，羁绊〔含贬义〕（用带有情感色彩的词，加强自己的立场）

Body 1

Admittedly, it is justifiable for some to advocate that guardians’ intervention is indispensable to some extent, since they are constitutionally responsible for their children’s growth. Smart parents understand that it cannot count solely on their kids, who, though indeed have the freedom, are too young to distinguish right from wrong, and that external conditions, adults’ advice and supervision, are needed. Therefore, mature adults, particularly parents, steps in and utilises their power. For instance, guardians may put a cap on what kind of video games teenagers play or what sorts of people adolescents make friends with in case those immature children get addicted to games containing too much violence or, even worse, sunk into gangs, which consequently render them off the right life track.

【解析】让步：从法律层面说，家长有责任防止孩子走上歧路，避免其受到不可逆的伤害，毕竟大多数孩子不够成熟，不能明辨是非。

Ø guardian n. [律]监护人

Ø intervention n. 干预（褒）

Ø constitutionally adv. 合乎宪法地

Ø count solely on 仅仅只依赖于

Ø distinguish right from wrong 明辨是非

Ø step in v. 介入

Ø put a cap on v. 限制

Ø off the right life track 偏离人生正轨

Body 2

However, apart from the aforementioned cases, too much interference on children’s making mistakes may incur repercussions running counter to adults’ expectation. More accurately, since most young children are to some degree rebellious, they are less likely to follow every piece of advice from adults, especially when the strict supervision develops into excessive control. Not surprisingly, this may fuel children’s grumble and push them to make mistakes instead. In fact, children should be allowed to learn from experiences. As long as young individuals are well-instructed, they are highly likely to learn from their mistakes about how to tell right from wrong, to take all factors into consideration before making decisions, and to reflect upon and correct themselves.

【解析】除去以上的极端情况，孩子应该有自由在一定条件下试错。从未成年人的特性出发，大多数孩子可能比较叛逆，一味地阻止可能适得其反。从试错中让孩子学会如何辨别是非，如何做决定前考虑周到，如何在犯错后及时弥补，远比家长直接介入更加令孩子印象深刻。

Ø interference n. 干涉（贬义）

Ø incur v. 导致（贬义）

Ø repercussion n. 后果（通常贬义）

Ø fuel vt. 加剧

Ø grumble n. 抱怨

Ø reflect upon oneself 反省