高中英语读后续写：5R解读、4句框架和3大原则（五四三法）

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来源：飚记英语  作者：孙三五

在教学中，读后续写我初步摸索出：5R解读故事；4句框架和3大原则（即：五四三法）

目前看，这种方法还是比较有效的，当然有个前提，需要积累若干细节描写的语句才能发挥更大的效果。后面应该会不断完善。

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题目：
读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两端，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Mike licked the last of the mint chocolate chip ice cream. It was almost time to leave. He jumped into the car with his parents and headed off to the Olympic-sized pool for the big swim meet.
When his race came up, Mike was confident. He was strong and swift. Mike climbed out the pool, smiling. He had just won first place, making him the fastest boy in his age group.
'Congratulations, son,' his father said. His mom gave him a hug, even though he was soaking wet.
A week later, it was time for another swim meet. Like before, Mike decided to enjoy his favorite ice cream flavor. Mike remembered that the last time he had won a race, he also ate mint chocolate chip ice cream first. Maybe he'd win again.
He’s taken first place again in his race. Mike was feeling pretty good. As it turned out, Mike decided to have some mint chocolate chip Ice cream before every one of the next few swim meets. He began to think of it as his lucky charm. After several months of placing in the top positions of every race he swam, Mike was feeling unbeatable. And he wouldn’t admit it, but all that ice cream was adding a few pounds to his athletic swimmer's build.
It didn’t take long after that for Mike to start coming in second place-and then third-and then last place in his races. The lucky mint chocolate chip ice cream had lost its magic.
On the day of his next swim meet, his mother sat down at the table with him. “Mike, we all love ice cream, but it's not healthy for your body to eat so much of it. Maybe it's time to quit the sweet treats for a while, especially before you go swimming.
Mike unwillingly agreed. He went to the swim meet, and didn’t perform well. His father offered to go running with him a few days a week to help him feel better and strengthen his muscles. The extra weight soon disappeared, and Mike found himself breathing easier at swim practices.
It was the last meet of the season, and Mike wasn’t sure what to expect. He felt healthy again, but he didn’t  know if he still had any speed in the pool.
注意:
1.       所续写短文的字数应为150左右；
2.       至少使用五个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.       续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.       续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语
Paragraph  1 :
As he drove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could.
Paragraph 2 :
His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time ,and everyone else too.
  如何快速写：
第一步：Analyze the story：5Rs
1. Read for characters:
Mike, his parents, Ice cream, teammates
2. Read for conflict / problems：
Ice cream and Mike’s performance: Whether is it a Lucky charm
3. Read for plot:
4. Read for emotional changes:
When his race came up, Mike was confident
Mike was feeling pretty good.
After several months of placing in the top positions of every race he swam, Mike was feeling unbeatable.
Mike unwillingly agreed.
5. Read for theme
What contributes to Mike’s success in swimming?
第二步：四句步定框架：
写读后续写不同于写其它作文，有可能需要先倒着写的
Step 1: 先把最后一句写好，即：主题句
Mike realized that one’s lucky charm was nothing but his diligence.
Step 2: 再把衔接句写好，即第一段的最后一句：
He dashed to the finish line.
Step 3: 紧接着每段的提示语句写角色的情感：
As he dove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could.
It struck endless energy and motivation into his body.
Mike’s jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else’s too.
The flowers in his heart were already in bloom.
接下来就是把每段的中间补充完整，记住三大原则：
1.Action—Response原则：角色A的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其它角色的一系列反应的。每段对话1-2句，不一定两个人都要说话，无声的动作也是一种response。
2.Conflict—Solution原则：一般而言第二段会有问题的solution，但本文和高考的读后续写文章出题不一样，因为solution在所给文章中就已经有了。
同时思考：能否在第一段出现一个问题，然后把它解决了或者没有解决。一方面是增加看点，另一方面也是给第二段铺垫。
3.Negative—Positive原则：写作中一定要体现情感的变化，无论前面是这样的变化，最终都是积极的。
最终：
As he dove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could.
 
1. It struck endless energy and motivation into his body. （心情）
2.“This is where I belong. I can win the race,” thought he, his teeth clenched and his eyes fixed on the finish line forward. （内心独白）
3.Suddenly, two figures whizzed past, which startled him. （心情变化））
4. Fearing to fall behind, he felt his heart pounded frantically and his mind went blank. （解释心情变化和问题）
5. Just then, he thought of his sweat and his father’s encouraging smile. （问题的解决方法）
6. Gradually, his worry gave way to his confidence and the last 5 minutes saw him dash to the finish line, followed by the end of the race. （衔接句）
 
Mike’s jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else’s too.
 
7. The flowers in his heart were already in bloom. （心情变化）
8. However, he knew he deserved the honor of championship. （拓展）
9. His parents came up and gave him a high five, grinning from ear to ear. （次要角色的回应）
10. “Hey, why not try your favorite ice cream and celebrate!” said his father, patting his on the shoulder. （对话1）
11. “Thanks, Dad, but I have given up the ice cream. It’s not such a lucky charm at all.” His eyes shone with wisdom.（对话2）
12. It was that day that Mike realized that one’s lucky charm was nothing but his diligence.（照应开头的主旨句）
  写在最后：
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