读后续写微技能:情绪的高分描写技巧
题型介绍
1.任务要求
提供一段 350 词以内的语言材料,要求学生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写,将其发展成一篇与所给材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文(150 词左右)。
2.考查目标
读后续写是一种将阅读与写作紧密结合的综合性语言测试。教育部考试中心刘庆思、陈康老师于 2016 年指出,读后续写主要关注学生以下四个方面的能力:
①把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力。学生需要了解所给短文的主要内容,清楚其关键词和语言结构的使用情况,并通过续写短文表现出来。
②语言运用的准确性和丰富性。学生能准确、恰当地使用所学词汇和语言结构,还能够根据内容需要使用较多、较复杂的词汇和语言结构。
③对语篇结构的把控能力。学生需要掌握上下文逻辑关系,所续写的短文与所给短文及段落开头语之间要有连贯性,所续写的短文内语句要连贯、有序。
④创造性思维能力。学生所续写的短文要具有较丰富的内容,包含详细和生动的情景、态度和感情描述。
情绪描写之笑
smile brightly; laugh; beam; light (sth) up; light up with; burst into laughter; burst out laughing;wear a bright/broad smile; give sb a smile
学一学:
beam: smile very happily
例:获胜者满意地笑了。
译法一:The winner beamed/smiled with satisfaction.
译法二:The winner wore a satisfied smile on his face.
light up: if someone’s face or eyes light up, they show pleasure, excitement etc
light up with:His eyes lit up with laughter.
Her face lit up with pleasure.
light sth up: to make someone’s face or eyes show pleasure or excitement
Suddenly a bright smile lit up her face/eyes.
练一练:
看到直升飞机,Jane 高兴地笑了起来。
【答案一】:At the sight of the helicopter, Jane beamed with wild joy.
【答案二】:Seeing the helicopter, Jane beamed with wild joy.
【答案三】:The moment she caught sight of the helicopter, Jane’s eyes/ face lit up with delight.
【答案四】:The moment she caught sight of the helicopter, a bright smile lit up Jane’s face/eyes.
判断正误:Seeing the helicopter, a bright smile lit up her face.
【答案】:错 seeing 和a bright smile 逻辑不一致。
情绪描写之高兴激动
V. dance; whistle; jump/leap with joy; feel a surge ofhappiness/delight/joy/excitement; be overcome with happines/delight/joy/excitement;(one’s eyes) twinkle;(one’s heart) beat/pound wildly
Adj. happy; delighted; overjoyed; excited; thrilled; wild with joy
练一练:
当她知道考试结果时,她兴奋极了。
【答案一】:When she knew the result of the test, she felt excited/ thrilled.
【答案二】:When she knew the result of the test, her eyes twinkled with excitement.
【答案三】:When she knew the result of the test, her heart was pounding with wild joy.
【答案四】:When she knew the result of the test, a wild excitement took hold of her.
【答案五】:Knowing the result of the test, she felt a surge of excitement.
【答案六】:Knowing the result of the test, she was overcome with excitement.
情绪描写之生气
feel/get angry/furious; feel a surge of anger(rage/fury); eyes blaze; storm out of/into/off ; storm(say angrily);
sth. makes sb’s blood boil(sth makes sb extremely angry); clasp one’s hands; clench one’s fists/teeth; speechless
练一练:
Sam 感到非常生气。
【答案一】:Sam felt very angry.
【答案二】:Sam stood rooted to the spot, his eyes blazing with anger.
【答案三】:Sam felt so angry that he stormed out of the room, slamming the door furiously behind him.
【答案四】:Boiling with rage, Sam shook his fist at me.
【答案五】:Filled with fury, Sam was unable to utter a single word.
情绪描写之伤心痛苦
sad; bitter; sorrowful; feel a surge of sadness; (sadness) surge within sb; one’s heart ache; be overcome with sadness
练一练:
她伤心不已。
【答案一】:She felt extremely sad.
【答案二】:A sadness came over her.
【答案三】:Her heart ached, tears streaming down her cheeks.
【答案四】:Numb with grief, she became speechless.
【答案五】:Feeling a surge of sadness, she couldn’t help crying bitterly.
【答案六】:Sadness surging within her, she burst into tears.
情绪描写之哭
cry; sob; weep; burst into tears; burst out crying; (one’s eyes) brim with/be full of/be filled with tears
练一练:
他哽咽欲哭。
【答案】:A lump came to his throat.
她的双眼哭得通红
【答案】:Her eyes were red from crying.
她的眼里满含泪水。
【答案】:Her eyes brimmed with tears.
眼泪沿着她的面颊流下来.
【答案】:Tears coursed/trickled/streamed/ran down her cheeks.
Oliver 独自一人在房间里流下了孤独伤心的泪水
【答案】:Alone in the room, Oliver cried bitter, lonely tears.
Wilbur哭着直到睡着。
【答案】:Wilbur cried himself to sleep.
六、情绪描写之害怕:
frightened; panicked; scared; speechless; in (a) panic; in a cold sweat; be full of fear; be filled with terror; be rooted to the spot; freeze; run away; flee; one’s knees feel weak; (hands) sweat;
练一练:
我感到很害怕。
【答案一】:I felt very frightened/scared/panicked.
【答案二】:I was in (a) panic/ was full of fear.
【答案三】:I stood rooted to the spot, brimming with fear/filled with fear.
【答案四】:I felt so scared that my throat tightened and my knees felt weak.
【答案五】:I froze with terror, too scared to move.
【答案六】:I was seized by a strong sense of horror; my palms sweating.
备考策略
写给教师的话
教师应关注学生读后续写作品的三个维度:即语言、内容和规范。
同时,更应关注统领以上三个维度的“制高点”,即思维,因为思维蕴藏在整个作品中,涉及内容的选择、逻辑的顺畅、语用的考量等。因此,在日常教学中,教师要创造机会,提供平台,使学生们释放他们的创造力和想象力,激发他们的表达动机。
写给学生的话
在日常英语学习中,学生应注意积累记叙文和故事类篇章中的词汇、句型和语段,尤其是涉及故事细节描写和人物的表情、动作、心理活动等的表达,丰富自己的记叙文类英文语料库。
“读书破万卷,下笔如有神”,考试中写出地道的英语句子,一定可以帮助学生提高得分。
另外,学生还可以利用平日所读记叙文和故事类篇章,如教材中的课文、课外读物以及阅读理解或完形填空中的语篇等有意识地进行续写思维训练。
如平时读到这类语篇时,阅读中可暂短停顿,根据已读部分文章的脉络,对文章进行发散思维,设想可能的几种文章结尾;或也可根据某一段落的首句提示,结合上文对该段进行合理设想,推断该段可能要讲述的内容等。