3分钟学会一个雅思7分句(第104期)
3分钟学会一个雅思7分句系列,
每次教你学会一个7分句子。
雅思7分作文,
就是日复一日、点点滴滴的积累。
It is believed by many that those people who read for pleasure are better in imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
应对上面这个题目,考生在主体部分写了如下一句:
Many human's imaginations come true in TV shows and movies by rich pictures, which books can only describe in pale words. The beautiful and grand scenes inspire people's endless imagination to the unknown world, science fiction movies are the best example.
※ 第二句多处在重复第一句,而未对第一句拓展解释。
改写如下
The ready-made images in films, especially in science fiction ones, are a chain of thoughts people are drifting off, based on which television viewers’ greater imagination about the unknown worldcan be ignited.
解析:
※ 重新梳理了考生了思路
※ 原文中我们能发现多处形容词的修饰,但这些词如beautiful and grand对scenes的修饰真的是有必要的吗?假设场景不大气美观,难道就无法激发想象力了吗?
* ready-made images 现成的图像
* science fiction films 科幻电影
* a chain of thought 思维链
* drift off 漫游
* ignite imagination 激发想象力